Monday, August 8, 2011
What do you think of my ghost story?
Great Story. It would have been a hoot if it was Aunt Georgia instead of Uncle George, but leave it the way you wrote it. How did Tyler get a key to the morgue? You need to explain that. Is he a medical student? You need a reason he has a key. I like the way you only show a few ghost at the morgue and then you move them on. I think if you had too many ghost in one place, you loose your story. People, even ghost hunters, don't want to see 500 ghost at one time. I am wondering about the part.....They ran for the gate when a man with Black eyes,.....I am wondering if that shouldn't be red eyes instead. It is midnight, you probably wouldn't notice black eyes, but red or yellow, or green eyes might be noticeable. Great story
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